Addie started it all! And since I am a big inggetero, here is my first attempt in Blackout Poetry! I just hope it makes sense. :)
When our minds run out of working memory
with no recollection
or
without comprehending any of the words
your attention absorbed
any left over
to remember a part
said in a statement
overall
thoughts drift away,
finding positive
creative and inventive moments
Is
likely noted.
haha nice idea! in fairness, somehow parang may sense yung blackout poetry mo :))
ReplyDeletesalamat zaizai. Welcome back sa manila!
DeleteWow, Orange. This is awesome. I'm glad you tried this one. Why is it that most have had their beginner's luck whilst I didn't? Good job and I hope you keep at it?
ReplyDeleteMay I also ask your permission to have this featured in my poetry blog? Does this have a title? Like "Memory" or something?
It will be an honor, Addie. Title is Missing Moments
Delete"a big inggetero"
DeleteI should have considered that as hint. I am so embarrassed. I am sorry. Eee.
You are fine. :)
DeleteLJ, I'm not sure if my first comment went in or not. I find blogspot not user-friendly when it comes to comments. Or maybe it's just me. I just want you to know that I appreciate your linking my blog to this post and that you have no idea how thrilled I am to see this attempt of yours. My first attempt was so-so while this one shows potential so I really hope that you keep at it.
ReplyDeleteAnd may I also ask your permission to have this posted in my poetry blog? Does this come with a title, like "Memory" or something?
Don't worry, hindi lang ikaw ang may ganyang problema, and I really apologize for the inconvenience, I hope hindi last comment na ito. :)
Deletenice one lj. i can feel the longing, very cool.
ReplyDeletehehe... thanks PM. Hirap magshade ng itim.
Deletenice one lj. i can feel the longing, very cool. PM
ReplyDeletemukhang nagkaproblem ka na naman sa pagcomment, thanks ulet.
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